My Screenplay
04/25/08 | Genius Mode, My Writings | 10 Comments
I finished the rewrite of my script!
(I’m also rewriting this POST, because, apparently, you have to hit submit BEFORE you close the window!)
Just for a little background on the competition, here’s a little information from their site:
Locker 13 will be an anthology feature film comprised of 6 vignettes along the lines of “Four Rooms”, “Short Cuts”, “The Red Violin”, or “A Night on Earth”. 6 award-winning directors will take the top six 10-15 page scripts submitted to this site, shoot them and then combine them to make one feature length film.
We are currently looking for quality scripts with the following criteria:
1. Answer the question, what’s in Locker 13? Locker 13 can be anywhere, a school, a bus station, an airport...a locker room. Anywhere, all that matters is that a Locker with the number 13 is part of the story. What is your story?
2. Genre is open.
3. The Rating can be left open right now, but we may ask the scripts be toned down so that we can shoot for a PG or PG-13 rating.
4. Limit the script to 1-3 locations.
5. Limit the script to 1-6 main characters, no crowd scenes.
6. The script has to have a beginning, a middle and an end.
7. No explosions, little to no special FX.
8. Think LOW BUDGET.
9. 10-15 pages in length.
Okay, there IS a crowd scene in the script, but I assure you it’s necessary!
Be aware that it has some disturbing content. YOU WERE WARNED.
For those of you who wish to read it, click here.
Keep in mind that this is my first attempt at writing a screenplay, so constructive criticism is welcome if you wish to give it!
Enjoy!
Until next…
Kyle W. Kerr
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Comment by SparklieSunShine :: Apr 26, 2008
Hmmm...Yeah...I’m just saying you might want to rethink it. I mean, I want you to win and not only is it a crowd it is a prom scene. Prom scenes cost mucho $$$ all those decorations, music, make-up, hair, expensive outfits. It’s a lot.
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Comment by Caryn :: Apr 26, 2008
Congrats on getting the script finished, rewrites and all! And good luck with the contest. That’s exciting.
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Comment by Pam :: Apr 27, 2008
I’m going to read your script as a reward for getting my page count in today, so I’ll comment on it later. I will leave you with a big, honking congratulations on the rewrite. I am so curious to read it--I loved Four Rooms. Let us know when it’s officially sent off so we can start our good mojo dance for you.
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Comment by Robin :: Apr 28, 2008
Great job, Kyle! I felt like I was there! And I think you can get away with a prom feel without having to shoot a huge crowd. The lights, the atmosphere, and the couple of characters you mentioned gave me a good picture. Best of luck! I’m keeping my fingers crossed for you!
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Comment by Pam :: Apr 28, 2008
I agree with Robin--your prom scenes are small enough I don’t think you need to worry about the crowd restriction. I thought it was very well done!
My only two suggestions are to use a different nickname other than babe (but I haven’t been a teenager in quite a while, so that may be just me) and a brief line that (graphic alert) Becky cut the cord with manicure scissors or something or the afterbirth fell out when Jessica stood up.
Best of luck to you--can’t wait to see it on screen (because, of course you’re going to win!)
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Comment by Robin :: Apr 28, 2008
I second what Pam said. You should include a quick description of the cord being cut. I don’t think a nail file would work, however.
Keep us posted on the progress!
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Awesome!
Though...you may want remove the crowd scene. They probably put that in because they can’t shoot scenes like that. Plus it looks really bad to go against a key requirement. It will make them think you don’t care or think you are better then them. You don’t want to take yourself out of the contest just because of one crowd scan. You know? Something you should really consider.
I’ll try to read it this weekend.